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sum_off
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Posted on 02-19-07 11:16
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I need to edit this story. Once I finish editing, I will post it here again.
Last edited: 16-Oct-07 09:32 PM
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Juggy
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Posted on 02-19-07 11:35
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A grande welcome back monséur!! Hope U ll be posting more!!Feels so good to read a interesting masterpiece in between!! Have a nice day out there!!..:)
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sndy
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Posted on 02-19-07 11:40
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Sum_Off, Welcome back...haven't read the whole thing.. still reading..just wanted to drop in and say hello...and welcome back !! :)
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PatrioticAashish
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Posted on 02-19-07 11:50
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thanks for the first line.........it fu(king long.............i am not even gonna attempt.
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Captain Haddock
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Posted on 02-19-07 11:56
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Sum Off - I did finish it in one reading and it is brilliant :) Some very interesting twists in the story - good plot and characterizations. Hope we get to read more of your work in the future. Best regards.
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bhusan
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Posted on 02-19-07 12:31
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Great narration. I'm just a little bit confused by the last phone call mentioned at the end of the story.
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world_map
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Posted on 02-19-07 12:41
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Sum_off, I haven't read it yet, I reckon it will take a while for me to read, but would like to suggest you to put it in the blog too. Its easier to find in the blog rather than to dig all the threads in kurakani when it disappears from sight. Thanks.
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nepali_keta12345
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Posted on 02-19-07 12:59
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hyperthread
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Posted on 02-19-07 1:06
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Nice one.. "415 is San Francisco" so who called Ravi? Saruva?
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mimangsu
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Posted on 02-19-07 1:30
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i reasoned with myself that TWO STARBUCKS, FOUR STORIES is a fiction...then i thought oh!well why not google it.... and lo! there is a Hema in john hopkins that too in childcare . Oh Well !!!then came back to real world. Sum off you painted the story so real.... i actually goggled it hehehe. Namaste to your writing. In my heart, there is this question...hope your ego ;O) will be all right ... i am not a good reader...haven't read any books except those course book that too i was forced into. But reading this and your old stories ...mostly the only point of view and the antagonist are female, though there has been a large cast. Why is that? Me a female simply feel so ugly :o( sob sob. Remember that there is no way that i like this story much less than i originally had just because of this fact. darshan hazoor!!!!!!
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freak_alien
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Posted on 02-19-07 1:38
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WOW ... Read it in one sitting and all i gotta say is whoa ! What a comeback Sum_off ... Absolutely loved this piece. Great narration, twists all over the place. Amazing Stuff Bro !
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amber
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Posted on 02-19-07 1:48
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Hey Mr. Writer, "She could not connect to people because most of the people of her age did not act normal in her presence. She caused lust in men, envy in women. She was a disturbance to both genders." I just lov these lines. How could you understand us(women) so well?
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yacc
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Posted on 02-19-07 2:26
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Finished in one go sum_off... Great story! Thanks..
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sndy
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Posted on 02-19-07 2:30
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Sum_off, Needless to say, simply amazing !!! What a comeback..do keep coming back with your wonderful writings..
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Tamang Lady
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Posted on 02-19-07 3:22
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.Heeded your advice and finished up in one sitting.. it's a non-blinker :-} it's worth waiting for.. thank you Sum_off.
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Bhaute
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Posted on 02-19-07 3:43
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Gone through it in one sitting. A Great Piece !!!! as always, Mr. OFF. Hats off to your imagination. Bhaute
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Posted on 02-19-07 4:25
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welcome back. wonderful piece. enjoyed every bit of it....
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SunnyDev
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Posted on 02-19-07 4:34
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Someone may see a lot of holes on it but it is a well knitted hammock. I am having a great siesta. What a comeback! We missed you a lot but it was worth your absence. I feel like you live with your characters. Story has a end but the characters don't die. They come to you every now and then; shares their misery and hapiness. They weave another plot for you. What do you think? Is Saruva beautiful? Eye her for a moment if she happen to cross your path. Mr Uprety, as an egoist writer, you have no remorse for the harm you did to some unknown life but you are more upset about being a game. Thank you for the excitement. Enjoyed it to the fullest.
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saroj
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Posted on 02-19-07 4:36
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'Sam would find himself reminiscing Saruva, his eyes fixed at a sickly blonde woman sandwiched between two muscular men.' Who are the two men that Sam was thinking of? Ravi and Sam? Some kind of foreshadowing I suppose.
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freak_alien
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Posted on 02-19-07 4:50
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>> saroj ji i think that sentence means that after not "getting" any from saruva, sam would rent the porn and pleasure himself ...
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