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 Story Unwritten---Nirman

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Posted on 07-01-05 9:34 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Although this may turn up as you would have expected but I hope you all will tolerate it anyways...And If the series gets delayed by one reason or another,I hope I will be forgiven...But I hope I will be doing my best not to keep u all waiting...

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Story: Unwritten

She clicked on the sign in button. There was only mail in her mailbox. Nobody had actually written to her in long time. It had been long time since she had talked intimately, or written intimately to anyone. Usually, it would be "just a hi" letter to friends, and she had become fed up of those kinds of mail; then she stopped writing to anyone. She was too busy and there were many other things to keep in track of than old friends. Sometimes, she would call one of friends, sometimes one of them would call, and that would just merely become hi, hello, what you are doing etc. etc.
She clicked on the Inbox sign; there was mail from someone whom she knew intimately, exactly after three years or so (she had lost track of time).
Quickly she clicked on to see the letter. The message began to unfold.
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Dear Smriti,
Had been long time, since we had kept in touch, 1364 days to be exact. I am somewhere else now, you must be somewhere, and I had always wished you would be much happier, at least more than me. I am just keeping up with myself.
After I left I didn?t find myself in need of anyone; maybe I had lost faith too, but I was keeping up with myself. It was then I met her, actually she came to meet me. She was charming, caring and knew what was inside me. I saw you in her, and I knew I was not doing right to her, but I loved her company. She loved me; and I was too much lonely now, I loved her back. I know I am not perfect for such a lovely girl, but this time I don?t want to loose love so precious. I am getting married next week.
I know I am kind of selfish to write something like this to you after such a long time, but I needed to talk with someone who knew me entirely; and I couldn?t think anyone else than you.
I hope you are lot happier, and at your best.
Love,
Aakash
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The turmoil began to unfold in her minds, she had still not forgotten him and reminiscences began to run vividly in her minds.
They had been friends for more than 7 years. They had known each other better than he/ she would know himself/herself, they were soul mate. It was him who thought of breaking the friendship and she hadn?t bothered to keep track of him. She was just like that, coolest as usual, and no loss was great loss for her, just life would go on. He had gone his own way and she her own.
She had seen him first in that coffee shop. She had seen him first with her old friend from school. After that she had met him at college.
"Hey we had met before, haven?t we??" he had come to her.
"Aan coffee shop ma Arun sanga bheteko hoina??" She had remembered.
"Yup, Tmi pani yehin padhne ho??" He had continued the conversation.
"Ho!!"
That day they had become friends formally.
Although they were from different faculties, there was some chemistry between them; they clicked as good friends pretty soon.

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Posted on 07-01-05 9:41 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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gr8 story... hoping to read nxt part soon...thumps up 4 ya...
 
Posted on 07-03-05 9:55 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Next day, she was eating with her friends at canteen. He came out of nowhere.
"Hey, Can I join you??" and without answer he had joined her.
At first she had find this somewhat weird, but he was such a charmer, he soon became friendlier to her friends than she was.
Pretty soon, he was hanging out with her friend?s circle. And She had somewhat loved his company. He was kind of happy go lucky, kind of whacky, but he was fun to be around. He would have thousand of jokes to make good laugh to everyone. He was fun-driven person, taking each day of life as celebration.
That day he was somewhat serious, somewhat diverted. He was talking less. And for next three days he just vanished away from the group.
She had clearly seen all the changes, but seeing that was not going away that easily, she thought of talking with him. She found him at the Caf? that day, sitting alone.
"Hey, K Chha??"
"Thikai?"
"Yeuta kura sodhanun??" She asked for permission.
"Sodhe hunchha, sodhna pani sodhirakhnu parchha??"
"Tmilai kehi bhairakheko chha ho??" She had hit the bull?s eye.
"I don?t know" He was hesitant to reply.
"Ok" she had taken coolly.
They had their first cup of coffee that day, black coffee and that day did they knew they both have common love for coffee, black and bitter, the taste of life.
Next day, He had come to her.
"Hey, I think I need to talk." He asked.
"Yeah, Ok." She had replied.
"I think I am in love." He had told her.
"Ammaai.. ko ni lucky kti??" She was surprised.
"Khoi malai uule aaru nai man paraunchha jasto lagchha, and I am not sure if I should tell her name, but I will tell you someday." He had replied.
"Bhana na please, ma kasailai bhandina k." She was curious.
"Someday k?" he was still somewhat hesitant.
She said something that day that struck deep inside his heart forever.
"Tmilai yeuta kura bhanu hai?hope you won?t mind." She tried to be as cool as possible.
"You know, you act as if you are so frank, but in real you are not, you always keep so much inside yourself." She had darted into his heart.
Nobody had told him this before, and this was the way he was, always with himself, never trying to share anything, never trying to show he has something to share. And that day he felt, "Here is someone who knows me better than myself."
He didn?t tell her the name, but that day, he felt somewhat intimate with her.

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Posted on 07-03-05 12:52 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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finally something from the critique himself.....kudos..great job
 
Posted on 07-04-05 12:38 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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''But He was "He" and the little things in life couldn?t make permanent change to his personality''

Same here

 
Posted on 07-04-05 7:18 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Posted on 07-04-05 7:34 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Nirman,

Were you only a male to see CARAVAN together with a group of girls?

WOW, you were really lucky. And, is it still continuing?

Keep going on...

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OK
 
Posted on 07-06-05 8:39 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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The thoughts came from past to present. She had breakfast to make, laundry to be done, and office to attend. Quickly she shut down the computer, and got ready to get back to normal routine she had. Thoughts of him still haunting her mind, she couldn?t think of anything else.
She went to the kitchen, made herself of a cup of coffee, fresh and with that enigmatic aroma, only he was not there to share, and she missed him more. She glanced at her watch, 8:30, and she had to get to the office by 9:00, "Damn!!!" her thoughts came back to reality. She hadn?t got enough time to fix herself the breakfast, quickly she searched the refrigerator and found some apples there, and quickly she grabbed one and ran out the meet the 9:00 deadline.
Aakash was still sleeping when his cell rang; he had installed that "Pal" ringtone at Mumbai and the cell was singing the same ringtone, the favorite song sang by KK for all time.
"Hello", he answered warily.
"Uutheko chhaina", His fianc?e, Anita was calling.
He looked at his watch, 8:30, Damn!! he had stayed late yesterday also, thinking all night to write or not write the letter, and at last he had written the lines.
"Aan!! Was awake till late last night." He showed reasons.
"Am I disturbing you?" She was too formal.
"Chhaina, formal nabana na.." He always hated anyone being formal.
"la la narisau na, diunso k gardai chhau??" She asked
"Nothing much, kehi plan chha??"
"Want to go movie?" She knew his avid love for movies.
"Kun??" He asked.
"Jai Nepal ma tyo Lucky chaleko chha re, haven?t seen hindi movie for while!!"
"Hunchha." He agreed.
"Meet me at 11:30 at Teku Bakery, aani tehin baata sangai jaamla." She made quick plan.
"Okies."
The phone went dead. He hadn?t been for halls at Kathmandu for long time. The old nostalgia for the movies at all those halls was long gone, but he still loved movies, and he had big collection of home DVDs.
When they had reached the hall, they didn?t get the tickets to the balcony, and had to take the ones for Rear Stall, anyways, they could watch the movies.
The hall was all changed, the old seats were gone, and it had new seats, the Dolby system, and everything like those PVR halls at Delhi.
He looked around, and reminiscence ran in his mind, the old corridor was all gone but the memory had remained.

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Posted on 07-06-05 10:14 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Nirman, love your details. You certainly have a knack for that.
 
Posted on 07-06-05 10:24 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Thnx Sitara Diz...Would love to see some from ur side diz...And yeah thnx..Dada, Okji and New user bro..and yeah Someone mysterious too...Hush lai ta pahile nai Thnx bhani saken ni..hai hai hai..:oP
Nirman
 
Posted on 07-09-05 9:50 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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gimme more, yeh dil maagey more ;P
 
Posted on 07-09-05 11:51 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Why was he Devdass suru ma Nirman?

Maile ta pade hai timro mitra. :)

I hope it is another Epic in the making a la unspoken love.

Waiting,
IndisGuise:)
 
Posted on 07-09-05 1:16 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Love is more interesting than politics on Sajha I must confess. Keep up the good work, Nirman.


 
Posted on 07-09-05 2:14 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Nirman, your rigorous efforts are applaud-able. I am reading, not yet finished, but traveling into the characters, through the paved road you have put forth.
Write more, and keep on writing. I am here, enjoying the sentences and almost every word. Thank you for sharing.

 
Posted on 07-11-05 12:50 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Nirman Da, Nice one. Enjoyed reading!! Keep writing ...
 
Posted on 07-15-05 12:21 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Hey Nirman,
I have been a silent reader here in Sajha for few months...love ur stories..this one is amazing too... Two THUMBS up!!!Now finally i've decided to write here since i got really tired of waiting for this one... can u believe... i went all the way back to dig through this thread....lauu na kahile aaucha hajur ko story ko aarko episode?

 
Posted on 07-17-05 9:42 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Sorry for keeping all of you waiting...But it seems like my writing skills are gone in haze for few days...त्यो दिमाग गाई चर्न गयो भन्छ नि....;)....well have been bg with other stuffs too...Visa and stuff..Hope u understand...I will be most probaly posting much more this week...Thanx again for waiting!!! I m all flattered dudes!!!
~Nirman~

 
Posted on 07-17-05 12:58 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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लप स्टोरि आयो ल निर्माणजी बाट , ल जावोस् न यार कति बेर हो !
;)
 
Posted on 07-17-05 7:40 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Nirman I thought I was supposed to buy your soul, student discount payencha?

And also nice story there. How's my CD burning process going on?
 
Posted on 09-23-05 12:17 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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These few weeks have been pretty hectic for me. After such a long tyam, I m writing sequels to above....more I will post maybe tonite...if I donot fall asleep writing!!!!....Thanx for having patience guys....Will be posting a sequel within 24 hrs....have nice day!!! or maybe night!!!
Nirman~*
 



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