I woke up to start my day as usual. It has already been my daily routine to wake up at 8.30 in morning. My mind alarm acts much better than alarm clock in that case..........I walke toward the toilet to brush my teeth as i get thirsty and tried to open the freeze on my way..............it looked strange ...................i feel like i am invisible..........i could not get the grip on handle................i rushed to toilet and got shocked to see no image of myself.I got lost an shocked for not seeing the image. I trun around and saw my body lying in sofa.............was i dead? yeah i was death................so many things started to hit my head..............i got shocked and numbed................i sat on the floor quietly.........Then after a hour i saw police, ambulance and fireman breaking the door and coming in.......................there was huge crowd trying to look inside my flat what was happened. I heard police calling my father after checking no in my mobile.................I was wraped in big plastic bag in zipper................i follow them to hospital as they cant see me or feel me..................On the hospital door my dad was waiting for me......................she was crying and his eyes was full of tears holding him by my brother..................he came near and slowly opend the bag and found me sleeping in quite state...................he sat on the floor..............................................all of the sudden the big white light took me to the flashback when i was in inside my mums womb................i saw my dad trying to communicate saying" mero chora, mero beta" they were so happy there just waitng to for me to come...............then i saw myself coming out and the happiness in their face....................it made me cry .........everything was like movie there............................then scene changed to the place where i was starting my first steps..........my dad was holding my hand and making me walk..........all those small thing make me realise how precisous i was...............................
all of a sudden the scene changes to my age of 21 where i was arguing on my GF. i was supporting my Rai gf...........they obivosly wanted me to marry the chettrini gal.......i was defending her.............they were not ready...........i slamed the door and left since then i never look back to them............................when i was in real out world trying to establish...................my gf showed me real face coz she realise that i nothing but broke without my parents..........she left me........they were right................
i dont have any point to go back and i started my own journey..................i was wanted to go back but i never made attempt..............i always said that to myself when i will be something on my own i will go back.....................My ego was big there.......I never call my parents.....................my bro told me to call mum coz she was really worried .........................i call her back after 2 yrs..............she asked me to come back................i said i will mum but let me be something." jindagi ma kehi garera matra ghar maa khta halchu and mukh dekhauchu". i still didnot apologise even i wanted ...............i was stuborn since i was kid.......................

Now, today i am going to show my face with closed eyes and cotton on nose...............sleeping like baby..................all my pirde and ego went in vain like evapoarted spirit...........................i could not resist my mum sorrow and she was crying..................i slienty touched her feet and kiss in her cheeks and forhead...................then left.

i call on my lord shiva....................i screamed and screamed......................" finally he came and said what can i do for u son" i said" god pls forgive me and let me born as my mum son again" he said" son it is granted but u have to wait another 100 yrs till then u will be a lost soul wondering in planet................................

sorry guys there should be he on above line not she

sorry guys there should be he on above line not she

Hey moneyminded,
I can't really make you out, but whatever you are... some of your postings give me the heebeejeebees! And particularly this thread is very insensitive... dedicating it to your parents. If you regret something or sorry about st... make up now. Don't create an after death scene and express your complexities. I don't know about others but I found this jibberish pretty disturbing. For gods sake... spare your parents from yourself.

Are you deliberately trying to push yourself off your rocker?

SofT

Firstly, Moneyminded, I really wish that the 'postings software' in sajha had spellcheck and grammar check...because it's painful to read your postings with so many errors!!!!
Secondly, I think that you need to grow up. One of the things that you need to do is to realize that you need not prove yourself to your parents. They love you unconditionally. Once you accept that fact, you will certainly be a happier and a more successful person.
Good luck with your parents and your writing skills!!!

Listen dude, i dont give daam about my writing style and spelling.............i suck in spelling so what .....................by the way we do have words to fix my spelling problem...............the way i write i created it................i not big fan of grammer.......................i am not here to be a journalist or author...................i long as i can write formal memo, letter to supplier, write a cheque to my staff and design menu that helps......................by the way this is new generation of writing....................

I really get out of my hand when some intellectual critising on grammer and spelling and they are so stupid sometimes that they start to think if writer uses I thats his story.............they forget that he is using the image of him to potray someone..............can u divert ur mind and look for second meaning in my thread...................................specially last one where i am requesting Lord shiva.............

common guys................is it your ego or are u jelous of popularity here......coz u dont get one.........or u cant inspire ppl.............speak simple languge so mass can understand.........all the population are not educated...........like u guys but they can read english in some extend............

for u r information my spelling jealous is worng above and i am using u to type you............so same in because...........coz..............make my life faster......................if u have bullet train available then why shuld u go for sajha bus.......got my point

and above one wrong is typing mistake................sorry sometimes i type 170 per stroke................

Moneyminded,
The irony here is that your 'simple english' is so full of grammatical, vocabulary and spelling errors that it's difficult for an average english speaking person to understand. You scorn the intellectuals but you are not even being easy on the five graders.

You contradict yourself time and again man. Ah well...

Pretty interesting story, if you focus on its meaning. Enjoyed it.


In contrast to what some of the viewers have said here, I had no problem whatsoever in understanding the story in one go. Though there may be some grammatical errors here and there, I dont think its a big deal.

I do not think it is a pretty big deal either. The person is trying to express his view using the freedom of speech in this site. As long as the postings are not offending and personal they shouldn't be the problem right!
Well moneyminded try to get it more simpler.Making it grammetically correct doesn't mean it has to use jargons. Just make it simple, do spell and grammer check from MS Word or some softwares like that and please for god shake forgive those ................................................ You are using......................a ..........................lot........................of ....................................................dashes............................THAT..............................it ..................................gets.........................................into ...................................people's...........................................................................................................................................................................................................................NEEEEEEEERVVVVVVVVVVVVVEEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSS


Get it!
Good Luck
Revival...
Waiting for a new light

MM is simply stupid.
DP

and a dik hed (spelling changed).
DP

i thought it was a good read. usually when i see a lot of ......'s i get turned off. but your story was interesting enough for me to continue reading. as far as grammar and spelling are concerned, it's no biggie. i got the point you were trying to make, and that's the main objective of any piece of writing.
as keynes said "in the long run we are all dead." Sometimes, it's only after realizing our own immortality that makes us wonder what is really important in life. i heard a story of a buddhist monk who asks a hypothetical bird sitting on his shoulder "what would l do if this were my last day in this life?" he then proceeds to go on with his daily activities keeping that in mind.

i think thinking about death gives you perspective. it makes you realize what is really important (family, friends, helping others) and what is not. for those smitten by the "existentalism bug" i recommed "Tuesdays with Morrie" by mitch albom..

Nice one Money Minded.

Btw, just out of curiosity, how is it that you get such frequent visits from Lord Shiva? I've been his bhakta since childhood and Mahadev buda has never paid ME a single visit! What is your secret? ; )

mm bro harip cha...kahile kahi ma ni sochu, there are so many things i cud have done, but missed out .. one day i will surely do it tho...they say its never late to do something good...life is a long journey, i have just started...

haha simplegal..smoke weed then u will get visited by loard shiva.. buda ra timi sang sangai jhyapp hunu..ani..

$M bro,
After writin' a sweet and short story,
or wateva it is,but no one appreciated ur writin', in other words gave a damn 'bout ur writin'. U know why, cuz u SUCK!!!. Well, yo mero boli hoina, yo the janata/sajhayti ko boli ho!!!

And bro, u dont kinda worry 'bout ur grammar, but just think b4 u wright.


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